Tuesday, January 31, 2017

Mrs. Seiffert

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Enjoy the Ride by Linda Woods
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20 comments:

  1. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch "I have" to "have I." Think about adding dialogue in the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  2. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch "I have" to "have I." Think about adding dialogue in the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  3. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph , third sentence, you should switch "I have" to "have I" to make it parallel. Think about adding dialogue in the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  4. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence, you should switch "I have" to "have I." Think about adding diolouge in the first paragraph to make the fall more realistic.

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  5. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch"have" to "have I." Think about adding dialogue in the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  6. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the 3rd paragraph 3rd sentence, you should switch"I have" to "have I." Think about adding dialogue to the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  7. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch " have" to "have I," Think about adding dialogue to the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  8. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph third sentence you should switch I have to have I. Think about adding dialog to the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  9. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph.
    I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch I have to have I.Think about adding dialogue to make the story more real.

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  10. You do a great job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence, you should switch "I have" to "have I" to make it parallel. Think about adding dialogue in the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  11. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch "I have" to "have I." Think about adding dialogue in the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  12. You do a good job transitioning to paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch "I have" to "have I." Think about adding dialogue to the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  13. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph,I wonder if in the third paragraph third sentence you should switch ¨I have¨ to ¨Have I.¨ Think about adding dialogue to the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  14. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence, you should switch "I have" to "have I". Think about adding dialogue in the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  15. You do a good job of transitioning from paragraph to paragraph.I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch "I have" to "have I." Think about adding dialogue in the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  16. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch "I have" to "have I". Think about adding dialogue to make the fall more real.

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  17. You do a good job transitioning from para to para. I wonder if in the third para, third sent. you should switch "I have" to "have I". Think about adding dialogue in the first para. to make the fall more real.

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  18. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch "I have" to "have I." Think about adding dialogue in the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  19. you do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph, third sentence you should switch "I have to" "have I" Think about adding dialogue in the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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  20. You do a good job transitioning from paragraph to paragraph. I wonder if in the third paragraph third sentence you should switch I have to have I. Think about adding dialog to the first paragraph to make the fall more real.

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