Monday, February 6, 2017

A novel

2 comments:

  1. I like how you added dialogue in your last paragraph. I wonder if in the first paragraph you switch "should" with "would." Think about adding more transition from one paragraph to the other.

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  2. I like how you described every piece of information exquisitely. I was just wondering if you ever finished the book and was it good. Try to add more sentences so that the reader can enjoy more.

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